Sunday, November 2, 2008

Neel Suthar

Sylvia Plath: Nature
In many of her poems, Sylvia Plath uses a wide variety of different types of imagery. In “two sisters of Persephone” and “spinster” we see images of nature in these poems and they tend to be descriptions of people or other objects. There are specific images in these poems that gives the audience visual pictures of the poem that she is writing.
In the poem “two sisters of Persephone” are many different meanings to the image nature. Plath uses these nature images to show both descriptions of people and also references to sexual themes. In the poem “spinster” Plath uses different meanings to her nature imagery, she uses they imagery to show other meaning in which case some are similar while others are different.
In both poems, the audience would see that they both have the same nature imagery, only with different meanings. In the poem “two sisters of Persephone”, Plath uses nature imagery to show images of people’s body feature s, while also using them as a reference to sex. In the poem “spinster” Plath uses nature imagery to describe her relationship with her husband Ted Hughes, she uses them negatively like “And heart’s frosty discipline” to show how much her husband really actually likes her.
In contrast to both of these poems, they both use multiple nature images in every stanza of each poem, this load of nature imagery helps Sylvia Plath convey to her audience about the cycles of nature. These cycles that she uses in her poems describe seasons or the current weather that she is feeling. For instance, in “two sisters of Persephone” we see that Sylvia Plath says “red silk flare…petaled blood…sun’s blade…green alter” to show the images of the season spring. Spring is a time when everything such as plants and tree are growing fast, in stanza five she describes somebody having sex outside while she sits inside doing nothing. In that stanza what Sylvia Plath is trying to convey to the audience is that spring is a time of rebirth as plants make flowers and animals and humans make offspring. While in Spinster Sylvia Plath conveys to the audience that is poem takes place in the transfer of winter into spring, Plath says “april walk” then “ice and rock” and the back to “bedlam spring”. Sylvia Plath uses both winter and spring nature imagery to show the transition from winter to spring. In an analytical view, this may seem as a point where Sylvia Plath is transitioning from sadness to happiness.
As we can see images of nature in these poems, they tend to be descriptions of people or other objects. There are specific images in these poems that gives the audience visual pictures of the poem that she is writing.

3 comments:

Anonymous said...

1.) You understood the demands of your thesis well and supported your thesis with adequate, supporting evidence. Good job!

2.) Capitalization errors: "In “two sisters of Persephone” and “spinster” we see images of nature in these poems and they tend to be descriptions of people or other objects." --> Capitalize "Two Sisters of Persephone" and "Spinster"

Specify your hooks or topic sentences. For example, "In the poem “two sisters of Persephone” are many different meanings to the image nature." You could change it to "In the poem, "Two Sisters of Persephone" the image of nature represent meanings that alter the understanding of the poem.

Explain the significance of the textual examples you use in a more detailed way. "Spring is a time when everything such as plants and tree are growing fast, in stanza five she describes somebody having sex outside while she sits inside doing nothing." You could relate to how Plath portrays the image of women through her actions. Consequently, the readers would have room to interpret what Plath was trying to explain with this sexual action.

Unknown said...

1) I like your creative interpretations and personal response to support your evidence. You provided independent personal responses well.

2) 1. You did internal citation wrong for your quotes. Change "red silk flare…petaled blood…sun’s blade…green alter" to "She sees how their red silk flare / Of petaled blood / Burns open to the sun's blade / On that green alter" and add ("Two Sisters of Persephone" 21-24).

2. You wrote "she uses them negatively like “And heart’s frosty discipline” to show how much her husband really actually likes her." in the last sentence of your third paragraph. You should elaborate on that idea and find more meaning to it rather than just ending it there.

3. You wrote "As we can see images of nature in these poems, they tend to be descriptions of people or other objects. There are specific images in these poems that gives the audience visual pictures of the poem that she is writing."
I think this is your conclusion but I am still confused.. You should change it to something like "To sum up, nature imagery in these two poems tend to describe people and other elements." to start off your possibly longer thesis.

4. You should use more quotes! Your analysis is great but I think you should provide more evidence.

But Good job NEEL!!

Joseph Yoo

IB English 1 said...

Tova Lichman, Period 5

Excellent use of the zippering technique to make your ideas flow in an order that makes sense. You have a lot of interesting ideas and pertinent information.

1) It is necessary to capitalize the titles of the poems “Two Sisters of Persephone” and “Spinster” when referencing them in your paper. Also make sure than you are not writing in a passive tone. For example instead of writing, “In both poems, the audience would see that they both have the same nature imagery, only with different meanings.” you should say “In both poems, it is evident that the same nature imagery is used to convey different themes.” or something to that extent.

2) You should use more quotes from your poems to prove your points. It is necessary to assert your interpretations of the works with evidence. When giving evidence, it is imperative that your works are fully cited and that the format for your evidence is correct. Instead of quoting from the poems without referencing, you should do so like this: “Copy the lines of the poems, / Exactly as they appear in the text / With a space, a dash and another space / Between every line.” (“Citing Poetry”, 1-4) Then in parenthesis, include the name of the poem if you do not already mention it in context and the line numbers on which the quote you’re using occurs. If you wish to cut out use the ellipsis to signify this. An ellipsis looks like this: … Also, it is important to remember that when you’re quoting a poem, you only need to put the line numbers if you already mention the poem’s name in context or in the first citation. Every time you cite a different poem you should include its name (in context or in citation), but only then.

3) Your paper contains good interpretation, but in some areas the way you worded certain phrases sounds awkward. Try not to repeat one word too often. If the structure is too confusing, it is difficult to successfully deliver the message of your poem. This is why presentation is one of the important categories on the IB rubric that Ms. Poulsen is using to grade these essays. Make sure that you work on the structure and presentation of your ideas. For example, it is confusing when you say: “In that stanza what Sylvia Plath is trying to convey to the audience is that spring is a time of rebirth as plants make flowers and animals and humans make offspring. While in Spinster Sylvia Plath conveys to the audience that is poem takes place in the transfer of winter into spring, Plath says “april walk” then “ice and rock” and the back to “bedlam spring”.” First of all, you need to go back and cite this correctly. Then, try to go back and read it aloud. Change the words that don’t make sense to you as you are reading it orally. For example, do not use the word “conveys” twice. It sounds very repetitive.

4) Also, it would be nice to expand on your conclusion. Relate your conclusion more back to your original thesis statement.