Sunday, November 2, 2008

Joe Yoo

Childhood Injuries: Physical Pain to Emotional Struggle
Injury is physical or emotional damage or harm done to or suffered by a person or thing. In addition, imagery is a description of a noun that can be visualized and appeals to your five senses. Thus, Sylvia Plath, who was a pessimist, uses this literary device to enrich her poems and enlighten her readers. Furthermore, in reference to her damaged childhood, Plath’s emotional insecurity and troubled persona reflects on her poetry in the form of physical and emotional injury imagery.
Sylvia Plath was born on October 27, 1932 in Boston, Massachusetts to Otto and Aurelia Plath. However, her childhood was anything but normal. She had a bizarre husband-wife relationship with her father, which put a lot of pressure on Sylvia to please him. She was also the only person allowed to talk to him about his day after a hard day of work. Her mother Aurelia and brother Warren were not the warmest of people either. Her mother was very controlling which influenced her to resort to her less criticizing parental figure. Subsequently, Sylvia’s dreadful family life affects her personality. She never had anyone to she could count on. So, certain traits such as her cynicism continue even later in her life.
Injury images are used in “The Colossus” to describe Physical pain her family brought her. “The Colossus” by Sylvia Plath is primarily about her relationship with her father. The colossus itself is a great statue that symbolized her father after his unfortunate death. Otto Plath died from untreated diabetes in his toe but ultimately from embolism in 1940. She first describes, “I crawl like an ant in mourning / Over the weedy acres of your brow / To mend the immense skull-plates and clear / The bald, white tumuli of your eyes” (“The Colossus” 13-17). This particular imagery shows her physical pain after her loss. Although she loathed her father for he things he did she still feels responsible for him even after his death. Sylvia feels “Thirty years now I have labored / To dredge the silt from your throat. / I am none the wiser” (“The Colossus” 10-11). This explains that Sylvia worked for thirty years to try to please Otto. However, the depressed tone shows that she felt like she never could. The “silt” in her throat was an injury which shows her handicap of speech and what she felt she lacked in. “Counting the red stars and those of plum color. / The sun rises under the pillar of your tongue” (“The Colossus” 31-32). This is an injury imagery of someone being knocked out and seeing stars, which is evidence to her abusive house life as a child. The “sun rising out” of the tongue is a visual imagery which shows life coming out of Otto Plath’s body. The significance of the mouth is because that is where Sylvia felt she lacked the most and disappointed him with her conversational skills.
Unlike “The Colossus” the “Mirror” has more emotional injury rather than physical to illustrate her cynicism. Mirror is a poem that expresses the harsh reflections of Sylvia Plath which lead to self-hatred. Her depression is severe and noticeable in this poem and it led to her suicide attempt in 1963 at the age of thirty. The mirror is significant because the emotional pain she feels is within her, and the mirror is the tool which displays her all her flaws. Sylvia believes that “I am not cruel, only truthful” (“Mirror” 4). Therefore, she lets antagonists, such as her dad, affect her own attitude. Sylvia writes, “She rewards me with tears and agitation of hands” (“Mirror” 15). This imagery is the transition from expressing her emotional suffering to physical through the tears and hands. She calls her suffering a reward because she feels like she can get the pain out of her. Consequently, since she does not feel comfortable expressing her own emotions, she uses another person to do it for her.
All in all, vivid images of emotional and physical injury allow Sylvia Plath to represent her current life within her poetry. Injury images allude to her damaged childhood. Thus, “The Colossus” contains physical imagery to describe her tainted relationship with her father; and in “Mirror” she uses emotional imagery to show effects of the abuse. Ultimately, both poems comprise a cynical persona attributable to her discontent for herself.

Word Count: 706

3 comments:

Unknown said...

KARA RICHINS - PERIOD 5

Hi Joey! :)

Overall I think you did a great job, you never strayed from your argument. You did well in expressing your interpretation and personal response.

What I first noticed was how you begin most of your sentences. For example, in your second sentence, you begin with "in addition," and in the next sentence you say "thus." You continue on with this for most of your sentences, and you don't have to. It breaks up your sentences too much and it looks like you're trying too hard to transition your sentences. If that's the case, just combine some into longer sentences.

I think (I'm not sure because it's hard to tell with the formatting) your 2nd paragraph begins with "Sylvia Plath..." and ends with "..in her life." Combine your last four sentences and get rid of the rest, the bio does not add to your analysis about imagery. Instead, use your extra word count to add more commentary on imagery.

My last suggestion is to make sure that you yourself are clear about how you choose to structure your essay. Personally, I detail what my evidence is directly in my thesis, in correlation with my paragraphs. I think this would make your essay stronger, that you use one paragraph to focus on emotional and one paragraph to focus on physical.

Phew, all done. Hahah :)

~ Kara ~

Unknown said...

I really liked the way you structured this in that everything is easy to follow and understand. In addition, you have excellent transitions from one paragraph to another.

The entire introduction is a little rough; the three sentences don't seem to have any correlation, and it isn't until the fourth sentence that I understood why you defined "injury" in the first place. You might want to change that so it's a little clearer that you're connecting Sylvia's imagery due to injury. Also, I don't think that much biography is necessary, although you definitely should keep the parts about "injury". Lastly, you might want to make your thesis clearer.

In the second paragraph, you say: "“The Colossus” by Sylvia Plath is primarily..." Take out "by Sylvia Plath"; it seems to ruin the flow of the sentence. In the next sentence, be sure to capitalize The Colossus when you're referring to the statue as that was its name.

Your conclusion is a little short and abrupt; I think you can restate your thesis and how the poems support it in a more organized and informative fashion.

blogger said...

I really liked how you structured your essay; it was purposeful and effective. You added information about her personal life but it only added to your argument and did not at all detract from the overall comparison between the poems. You showed an excellent knowledge of the text and I found your interpretation to be convincing.

However, I thought your use of language and overall presentation of the essay can be slightly improved upon.
1)I thought your introduction sentence could have been more concise and interesting. ex."The imagery of injury is a powerful literary device that pessimist Syliva Plath often used to enrich her poems and enlighten her readers." This is simply one way to shorten introduction sentence and invite readers into your essay.
2)Another instance I found to make a sentence more concise is :"She never had anyone to she could count on. So, certain traits such as her cynicism continue even later in her life. " and I'd change it to "She never had anyone to rely upon and consequently carried bitter feelings throughout her life."
3)Lastly, I thought this sentence could have been more clear: "The mirror is significant because the emotional pain she feels is within her, and the mirror is the tool which displays her all her flaws." "The importance of the mirror is its utility as a tool through which Plath can see her own flaws and emotional pain."
All in all, you had a good essay with an interesting interpretation and these are all simply suggestions to improve an already good essay!