Sunday, November 2, 2008

Angelina Sorokin

Is Marriage truly "your last resort"?: the element of injury
The poetic images of injury are intertwined in “The Applicant” and “Two Sisters of Persephone” to emphasize how life with and without marriage and sex has a negative effect on women. “The Applicant” shows the injuries of life before marriage and “Two sisters of Persephone” contradicts the theme of a happy and pain free life that is shown in “The Applicant” by showing life during and after marriage and this is accomplished by involving the element of injury.
Both poems use injuries to affect the different aspects of marriage that are presented in the two poems. In “Two Sisters of Persephone”, marriage is transformed from a wonderful awaited experience into something dreadful that brings no lasting happiness. Although the marriage of the second girl in the poem starts off good in the beginning, with her being “bronzed as earth” (13), it slowly changes her into a “bitter” (24) women. This girl was the care free one who decided to get married unlike her sister who stayed in her “dark” (5) room and in the end of her life “goes graveward with flesh laid waste” (27). The married girl felt that she was making her life easier and better in a since, but for some reason she still turns as “sallow as any lemon” (25). This shows that marriage may keep you happy for a while, but that happiness doesn’t last forever. On the contrary marriage is glorified and held in high regard in “The Applicant” and the use of injury in the beginning of the poem enhances the benefits of marriage. When the speaker of the poem asks if “you war a glass eye, false teeth or a crutch…” (3), the poem tries to show that everyone is incomplete without marriage and that if you have ”stitches to show something’s missing” (6) then marriage will surely work for you. Interestingly enough the rest of the poem only shows how marriage completes the male figure, leaving the women empty. Line 39 tells the man that “it’s your last resort” as if the women will survive without marriage but not vice versa. Marriage becomes a trap that women fall into because of the injuries that they experience in life, and the feeling of being “empty” (10).
Marriages usually involve sex and both poems use the element of injury to shed new light on what sex actually does to the women and to show that it is not entirely a good thing. In “The Applicant” the theme of sex is hidden and not a main part of the poem. The “living doll” (33) in the poem will “do whatever you tell it” (13) and that’s a “[guarantee]” (15), showing the women’s vulnerability when it comes to sex. The women doesn’t want to go back to her old life which was full of injuries so she continues with whatever she has to do to keep her marriage . Sex is a clear theme in “Two Sisters of Persephone” and the strong words that Sylvia Plath uses make it clear to the reader that sex brings many injuries. The carefree girl is the target of injuries because of her choosing sex. “She sees how their red silk flare of petaled blood burns open to the sun’s blade” (17). This one sentence has so much emotion in it, showing all the hurt of marriage. By using words such as red, blood, burns, and blade we see that sex is negatively portrayed. Especially because it leads the girl to becoming “bitter” (24) no matter how good it was. These two poems definitely use injuries due to sex to show that trying it doesn’t give you anything to be proud of in life, because in the end you will still end up empty.
Examining these two poems shows that the usage of injury makes the themes what they are and that marriage and sex both dont bring any lasting please to a women, but just leave her empty and lost.

5 comments:

Anonymous said...

Hey! It's Joanne!

1.) I thought you're thesis was answered accurately and in an organized manner in your essay. You understood excellently the specific demands of your thesis. Overall, this made the essay easier to read. Good job!

2.) I think this sentence: “The Applicant” shows the injuries of life before marriage and “Two sisters of Persephone” contradicts the theme of a happy and pain free life that is shown in “The Applicant” by showing life during and after marriage and this is accomplished by involving the element of injury." has too much information in it. You should break it up into: "The Applicant" shows the injuries of life before marriage, while in "Two Sisters of Persephone" it contradicts the theme of a happy, painless life during and after marriage."

I think you should incorporate a more variety of words. For example "marriage" is mentioned a lot throughout the essay. It is hard to replace marriage with another word, but when I was reading your essay it felt really repetitive to me. You should change it to "relationship" or something of the like.

There are some minor punctuation errors here and there like: "Interestingly enough the rest of the poem only shows how marriage completes the male figure, leaving the women empty." --> "Interestingly enough, the rest of the poem only shows how marriage completes the male figure, leaving the women empty."

nelya said...

1. You analyzed and compared the poems well. Your essay shows good understanding of the poems and the symbolism used. Your essay is well organized and easy to follow.

2.
a.You language is not varied and there is a lot of repition.
b.“Examining these two poems shows that the usage of injury makes the themes what they are and that marriage and sex both dont bring any lasting please to a women, but just leave her empty and lost.”
You can change this sentence to say: “Analyzing these two poems helps the reader see how the usage of injury demonstrates the theme that marriage and sex don’t bring any lasting pleasure to a woman, but instead, leaver her empty and lost”.
c. I am assuming that this last sentence is your conclusion. However, I am not sure. A conclusion should include more analysis, and your final thoughts on the poem.

• Good job.

IB English 1 said...

Comments by Nitya Gopinath:

1. Very well-developed ideas and your body paragraphs follow your thesis statement very well. You incorporate quotes really well too.
2. a) Your thesis statement is a little too wordy. I would split it into two sentences. The first sentence "The Applicant" shows the injuries of life before marriage and "Two Sisters of Persephone" contradicts the theme of a happy and pain free life as that shown in "The Applicant". The second part of the sentence could be moved to your body paragraph instead of in your thesis statement.
b) You most likely would have recognized this but there is a spelling mistake in this sentence "When the speaker of the poem asks if “you war a glass eye, false teeth or a crutch…”...it's wear.
c)It might just be me but I feel that there are too many quotes out of the book. I feel like every sentence I read there is a quote of the poem. I mean you really incorporate the quotes well but I feel there are too many quotes.
d) I am guessing that the last sentence in your essay is your conclusion. You should add more to your conclusion and that sentence does seem a little too wordy. Maybe you could split it up into two sentences or delte the last part after the comma "but just leave her empty and lost."

Good job on your essay!

IB English 1 said...

1.
- You had a very well organized essay
- Your thesis was clear and concise
-You had good and new ideas
2. -Although you had good ideas, soemetimes the evidence you used to support it was not the best. An example of this is,"Although the marriage of the second girl in the poem starts off good in the beginning, with her being “bronzed as earth” (13), it slowly changes her into a “bitter” (24) women. This girl was the care free one who decided to get married unlike her sister who stayed in her “dark” (5) room and in the end of her life “goes graveward with flesh laid waste” (27)." these were good exaples but you should use quotes taht you can explain more and analyze
-Again, you had good ideas, but sometimes the way you worded them made it sound a little redundant. An example of this is with the use of the words "relationship", and "marriage"
- Your conclusion paragraph was not very long but you said "Examining these two poems shows that the usage of injury makes the themes what they are and that marriage and sex both dont bring any lasting please to a women, but just leave her empty and lost". You can add to this by discussing the effect this has on the reader maybe.
~Linda Tannous

IB English 1 said...

ANGELINA--I LOOOOOVE YOU!!!!

Thankyou SO much to replying back. You are the only one who wrote me a comment. Thanx for keeping your promise!
Your comments helped a lot.

xoxo Warda Nawaz xoxo