Sunday, November 2, 2008

Evan Bare

The Use of Fear through Culture

In the human mind, language and culture are intertwined and create differences between people. Often these differences are minor, but sometimes they create tension and hatred between people. In Daddy and the Arrival of the Bee Box, Sylvia Plath uses language and culture as an emotional battle ground so she can conquer her feelings.
Sylvia’s poem Daddy uses culture and language to separate herself and her father. She calls him Nazi, where she was the Jew that was being tortured. In line 34 she says, “I began to talk like a Jew,” compared to her Nazi father. These two different cultures had a deep hatred for one another and is used to create a stark metaphor for Sylvia’s relationship with her father. Where Sylvia was peaceful, her father wanted power over her. This emotional turmoil continues, and in line 70 she says that, “the voices just can’t worm through.” This shows that even though her father can say things to make her feel better, she won’t listen to what he says because she doesn’t believe him. If she did, she would be dropping her guard for him to launch another attack. Eventually her hatred leads to resolution when in the last line she stands up for herself by saying, “Daddy, daddy, you bastard, I’m through.” The ideological differences of her and her father were settled, letting her continue with her life without him.
In comparison, The Arrival of the Bee Box is more about confusion between languages and cultural barriers. When the Bee Box arrives she doesn’t know what to do with it, but her confusion leads to fear. “It is the noise that appalls me most of all, /The unintelligible syllables,” (“The Arrival of the Bee Box” 17-18). She does not understand what the bees are saying so she becomes afraid of them. This fear about what is in the box is what she needs to conquer in the poem. It worries her because, with a new language comes a new culture. “I have simply ordered a box of maniacs.” (23) Due to the fact that she doesn’t understand their language or culture, she instantly assumes they must be maniacs. This makes her even more frightened because maniacs will kill for no reason in her mind. This new language and culture makes her fear what’s inside, and to gain stability she finally says, “Tomorrow I will be sweet God, I will set them free.” (35) By getting emotional stability about the box, she no longer hears what it truly resembles, the past.
When people don’t understand a language or culture, they begin to fear it. This type of fear is often called xenophobia, fear of that which is foreign or strange. Like all other fears, this is caused by differences or the unknown. Sylvia Plath uses this common type of fear in her poems to show how she is afraid of past events as well as her father. By the end of her poems she overcomes this fear to reach mental stability and regain her power.

Word Count: 513

4 comments:

IB English 1 said...

Holly Addington, Period 4

1. Your essay had and excellent interpretation of the imagery in Plath's poems.

2. a. While I can tell what imagery you are trying to show Sylvia uses, you never state what it is. In your thesis you say "language and culture". You could change this to "imagery of foreign cultures". A language is something that is a part of every culture. After all, the American culture would be very different if we all spoke German instead of English.

b. You have to very seperate comparisons here. You have central ideas you are trying to convey, but they are listed twice. The poems should be used as examples, and placed together. Use the zippering technique so that you only state an idea once.

c. While your conclusion is very good, you shouldn't include new ideas in it. This idea of xenophobie is not put into your essay until the conclusion. A conclusion should be used to wrap things up and end the essay, not introduce another idea or an analysis.

Unknown said...

You picked a really unique topic that no one else really thought of, so kudos for that.
1. Make sure to put the names of poems in quotes in the body of your essay and not in your citations. A minor detail, but we still have to follow MLA format.
2. "Where Sylvia was peaceful, her father wanted power over her." Unless this is something that you interpreted from reading "Daddy", I think that you should just take this sentence out because it doesn't really relate to what you're talking about. If this is part of your analysis, you should say so and back it up with evidence from the poem.
3. You say that, "By the end of her poems she overcomes this fear to reach mental stability and regain her power," but does she ever really get over her past and these fears? If she did, why was she so depressed and why did she commit suicide? I would say something to the effect of, "She uses her poems in an attempt to get over these fears, but this is all in vain because she never truly gets over these events."

IB English 1 said...

Drew Cylinder

1. You clearly have a good understanding of this topic and chose two different and interesting poems to analyze.

2. The first sentence in your first paragraph is a little bit awkwardly worded, I think I know what you are trying to say, but I do not like how you said it. You said: "In the human mind, language and culture are intertwined and create differences between people," I would rewrite this sentence or throw it out and write another one. You also repeat the word people at the end of the second sentence, use a word like ethnic groups or humans or groups of humans, don’t repeat people. I would also reword your thesis. Your current thesis is: “In Daddy and the Arrival of the Bee Box, Sylvia Plath uses language and culture as an emotional battle ground so she can conquer her feelings.” Change “so she can conquer her feelings” to “on which she overcomes her internal struggles.” Then again, you might want to change the entire sentence, if she really did conquer her feelings, then why did she kill herself?
In your next paragraph, I would cut the sentence “Where Sylvia was peaceful, her father wanted power over her.” It is frivolous and not entirely true. The sentence “This shows that even though her father can say things to make her feel better…” I would cut out “This shows that” and in the sentence before, I would take out the “that” in “she says that, “the voices just can’t worm through.”” In the last sentence “The ideological differences of her…” should be changed to “The ideological differences between her…”
I am not sure if you interpreted the “Arrival of the Bee Box” correctly. I do not think it is so much about cultural barriers rather than internal problems or fears. The sentence: “This fear about what is in the box is…” should be changed to “This fear of the box’s contents is…”. Change the sentence “… maniacs will kill for no reason in her mind.” to“…in her mind, maniacs will kill for no reason.”
I don’t entirely agree with your use of xenophobia, and don’t agree with your conclusion that Plath conquered her fears, after all she never opened the box.


Sorry about any spelling/grammar errors…

Unknown said...

1. Good essay, most everything is connected or relevant to each other.

2.a) "In the human mind, language and culture are intertwined and create differences between people."
This is a good starting sentence since it ties in with your thesis, but i found it a little confusing, maybe try rewording it.
b) "xenophobia"
It is good to include this word, but maybe put it in the intro instead, I almost thought you were going into a whole new idea.
c)For all those "In line X" you might want to simply make internal citations.